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Leslie D. Soule - Building Fallenwood

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Building Fallenwood by Leslie D. Soule

Thank you for joining me today! I intend for this blog to be a sort of world-building walkthrough for fiction fantasy writers, as an example of what considerations ought to be addressed in this strange and wonderful process. At the time that I have started writing this, I have notes and a blank piece or poster board taped to my closet. Ah, the glamorous life of a writer! Yet, this is how all worlds begin.

It strikes me that an explanation of the purpose of world-building is in order. I recently returned from the RT Booklovers’ Convention in Los Angeles, where I had the chance to speak with fellow e-book author Robert Roman – who impressed me with his mastery of fictional world-building. He wove tales that held me spellbound and as I listened, I realized that there is a point where the lines between fiction and reality blur, and where something resonates within. He was talking about a fictional character in a made-up land, who saw a fictitious woman and knew that she was his light. The telling of it left me with a longing for something nameless. That one idea held my love and sorrow, and a realization of when I’ve seen light in human form as well.

So I begin my world-building by determining the resources I have to draw from – an old, very basic kingdom map I’d created with Microsoft Paint, my Fallenwood manuscript, and the short prequel myth I’d created, called “The World’s Divide”. When I first wrote Fallenwood, I knew that I would need at least a basic map of kingdom boundaries. Boundaries are important for determining alliances and relationships between royal houses. I’m beginning my world-building by taking this very general map of kingdom borders and sketching it onto the poster board. Being an artist, I’ve found that looking at a blank canvas can be quite daunting. So with something on the map, I feel better now.

Everything should be sketched in pencil, for now. Before I start adding things to the map, I’ll be using whatever resources I have to determine locations I’ve already written about. Onto the map, I begin labeling kingdoms with their names. A few locations had been marked on the basic map, and here’s where we get to begin creating symbols and a map legend. I rifle through my taped-on notes, to find that the sequel will require large crystals to be interspersed throughout my kingdoms. I denote these with stars. Another note informs me that plasma craters must be drawn in and have to follow the locations of the crystals. Once my notes are no longer helpful, I must move on, to the largest resource in my arsenal – my manuscript of Fallenwood. Fortunately, I’m familiar with what parts I can skip and which chapters might hold pertinent information.

Suffice to say that after adding in all of my reference material, I was left with a map that was still surprisingly empty, and yet full of possibility. Map creation is a stepping stone, and an important one, but a small step in the huge task that a writer has, of building an entire world from nothing.

Whew! What a process! Well thanks for sticking with me through it. What techniques do you use for “world-building”? One lucky commenter will win a copy of my short story “The Devil’s Bidding” in e-book form.

Leslie D. Soule
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Bob Danierla - Habiba, My Habiba - Exclusive Excerpt

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Habiba, My Habiba by  Bob Danierla

Habiba, My Habiba is set against the horror of the AIDS epidemic in Africa. This is a personalized account of a young man who set out to earn money in a distant city in order to get married.

But in due course he is distracted from his efforts to earn money and takes up with several loose women.

He falls in love with one of them, who has a heart-rending story of her own to tell. These star-crossed lovers, finally having found each other, come face to face with a bleak future exasperated by their lack of money or resources.

Even as they struggle with the practical problems of trying to earn a decent living, and traveling to another country for work, they are faced with the ultimate problem, AIDS, which they called simply “the syndrome.”

It is a tragic Romeo and Juliet story with a modern twist that focuses on this modern scourge.

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Dear Janie,

How can I ever forget how it was then, when we parted? That was about seven years ago. You can visualize how much has changed since then. You cannot quite place me Janie if I tell you I have lived in the world in just seven years. Now I have the courage to remember you are at home expecting me back any day. But then what is the use now, Janie, what really is the use?

Can you remember it was a Saturday night breaking in to the Sunday of that November 86? I can't remember what exact date it really was, Janie, but I am quite sure you would have reminded me had I been talking directly now to you. I can remember the cold night air that blew our faces as we talked. How hard I struggled to inform you how I felt about you, as the deafening high life music thundered behind us in the village beer parlor. I remember too it took you a whole five minutes to understand what my lips quivered to express in the cold night. I can as well remember distinctly your soft, voice propose we take a walk down River-bank, in the mist of the sleeping River-bank settlement and the boisterous river creatures, whose noise was, as rowdy as the drunken beer parlor gramophone. Then as we approached the soft sandy beach, I felt you hold me unexpectedly and brought me nearer to you. Our lips met and you devoured them with a hunger that amazed me, quenching your thirst with the drawling juice that streamed from my mouth. Lord, how my heartbeat amplified and my body so young trembled in trepidation, for that which lay further on.

Suddenly we were hot and panting like dogs in a hot mating season. How knowledgeably you played your tongue in my mouth. You were only seventeen then, Janie, you were just a child, yet a wholly blossomed woman. To envisage I was only twenty-one then, Holy Jesus! But then that was all the intimacy we ever had. It was only two months later that we agreed to get married. Then out of the blue the curse came upon our village. Do you still bear in mind that Sunday afternoon, we saw uncle Jerry tumble out of that prostitute's window? The one who was married to brother Jethro your elder brother? I can recollect she was called Angela. I remember you gripping my arm and exclaiming animatedly, "What treachery, Ferdi! What treachery. How come Uncle Jerry is coming out of brother's house in that manner?" "Sh", I said, "Don't let him see us". Do you consider what we were doing ourselves Janie? Your nipples had grown large with anticipation. Your hands were in my flytrap and my member had grown dangerously giddy and hard up making me so uncomfortable that I cried out in pain. We were lying on the hot sunny river beach. Yet what betrayal it really was then, Janie, to see Uncle Jerry coming out of that prostitute's window. That window you described was your brother's. That was exactly the time, Janie. The time everything began going wide of the mark.

Uncle Jerry rapidly was taken ill. They said he was suffering from tuberculosis. He grew lean and was often getting exhausted. He was in illness for three long months. He died of that outrageous disease that everyone thought was tuberculosis, yet everyone was prepared to shrug shoulders with indifference when asked what really had him. How long did it take Angela, Janie? I mean Uncle Jerry's woman. Hers was swift and precise. She died giving birth to what people could murmur only in the night and in the dark corners of the day or behind closed doors was Uncle Jerry's child! I remember your brother had a brawl with that college teacher, the one who said your brother's wife had given birth to another man's child, a child your brother was divulging his filthy teeth in public was his'.

That reminds me of yet another thing, Janie. I remember your brother’s teeth were reddish dirty. Cola nuts, wasn't it? What beats my mind is that, your mouth was so perfect. So sugary and so hygienic that it never smelt. I come to remember now that sweet chilly night again! True enough that is utterly another account altogether.

How long did it take your brother to give up the ghost? I heard from the traders who came this way he followed the "tradition" untimely enough. Just a few months after I left, I was also told, like I predicted that the village is blazing like wild fire on grass houses with Uncle Jerry and Angela's curse. What a compassion for Shangkwa. The village we treasured so much.

Perhaps Janie, you would be wondering what I am rattling about, when your heart is yearning and crying out for my long absence. I will soon enlighten you Janie. I will soon tell you, by the time this epistle comes to a close...

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Death of the Oracle

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Bob Danierla is an author and songwriter. Completed elementary and secondary education in Cameroon and university education in Nigeria. He returned to Cameroon and worked in various capacities both in Education and industry before moving to the United States. He lives with his wife and two children in the city of Alexandria Virginia. Habiba, My Habiba is Bob Danierla’s second novel, Death of the Oracle being his first.


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Jim Strickling - Man and His Planet - Exclusive Excerpt

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ARCHAEOELECTRICS AND THE ISRAELITES

From Chapter XIV of MAN AND HIS PLANET

Glow discharges of various kinds have long been of interest to man, no doubt evoking a great deal of wonder in times past. The forms of discharge are so varied that it was only during the twentieth century that they were shown to be different aspects of the same basic physical phenomenon: In every form, the glow discharge is a manifestation of the conduction of electricity through gases. One form occurring in nature is the faint glow known as St. Elmo’s fire, seen at the top of ships’ masts at night when thunderclouds are near, named corona after the Latin for crown.

In our generation, we all have grown up in the midst of electrical technology. We have no difficulty distinguishing luminous electrical phenomena from the chemical luminosity of fire. But suppose that electricity were unknown except through its natural manifestations. How would ancient man have described a corona discharge? Most certainly as fire—the process of combustion.

Atmospheric electric fields are commonplace; however, various ancient descriptions of strange fire suggest that in the past these fields achieved magnitudes far greater than is usual today. These and related natural electrical phenomena seem to explain a number of otherwise mysterious events recorded in the Old Testament.

In Exodus 3:2 & 4, we read that “. . . the angel of the Lord appeared to [Moses] in flames of fire from within a bush. Moses saw that though the bush was on fire it did not burn up. When the Lord saw that he had gone over to look, God called to him from within the bush . . .”

Many mundane explanations have been offered for Moses’ experience. Moses wasn’t stupid. He wasn’t looking at some brightly colored plant. This was unusual enough to cause him to turn aside to examine it. Furthermore, a bush that burned without being consumed was not on fire. This was a naturally-occurring corona discharge. (God’s presence was another matter.)

It seems that natural electrical activity was rampant during the time of the Israelite Exodus. The Shekinah Glory above the Israelite Tabernacle was a much more magnificent version of the same phenomenon. The Seventy Elders (Exodus 34:29-30) experienced this in a personal way. The coronas enshrouding each of them were believed to be the Spirit of God. There were also negative ramifications from some of this electrical activity, however, causing many deaths.

Holy Scriptures of antiquity often had their origins in the inexplicable. They contain records of events that could be perceived only as miraculous. Natural electrical phenomena, not to be comprehended for millennia, provided ample cause of both wonderment and fear. The developmental pattern of this literature was incomprehension, then transcription and veneration, and then exegesis. The sacred writings of the ancients generally had a basis in reality, and they tell us more than their authors knew themselves.

The interested reader can find in my book MAN AND HIS PLANET – An Unauthorized History a complete analysis leading to a reconstruction of the ancient Israelites’ “electrical experiences.”

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Lois McMaster Bujold - CRYOBURN - Exclusive Excerpt

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by Lois McMaster Bujold

Copyright 2010

Chapter One

Angels were falling all over the place.

Miles blinked, trying to resolve the golden streaks sleeting through his vision into mere retinal flashes, but they stubbornly persisted as tiny, distinct figures, faces dismayed, mouths round. He heard their wavering cries like the whistle of fireworks from far off, the echoes buffeted by hillsides.

Ah, terrific. Auditory hallucinations, too.

Granted the visions seemed more dangerous, in his current addled state. If he could see things that were not there, it was also quite possible for him to not see things that were there, like stairwells, or broken gaps in this corridor floor. Or balcony railings, but wouldn’t he feel those, pressing against his chest? Not that he could see anything in this pitch darkness -- not even his hands, reaching uncertainly before him. His heart was beating too fast, rushing in his ears like muffled surf, his dry mouth gasping. He had to slow down. He scowled at the tumbling angels, peeved. If they were going to glow like that, they might at least illuminate his surroundings for him, like little celestial grav-lights, but no. Nothing so helpful.

He stumbled, and his hand banged against something hollow-sounding -- had that bit of wall shifted? He snatched his arms in, wrapping them around himself, trembling. I’m just cold, yeah, that’s it. Which had to be from the power of suggestion, since he was sweating.

Hesitantly, he stretched out again and felt along the corridor wall. He began to move forward more slowly, fingers lightly passing over the faint lines and ripples of drawer edges and handle-locks, rank after rank of them, stacked high beyond his reach. Behind each drawer-face, a frozen corpse: stiff, silent, waiting in mad hope. A hundred corpses to every thirty steps or so, thousands more around each corner, hundreds of thousands in this lost labyrinth. No -- millions.

That part, unfortunately, was not a hallucination.

The Cryocombs, they called this place, rumored to wind for kilometers beneath the city. The tidy blocks of new mausoleums on the city’s western fringe, zoned as the Cryopolis, did not account for all the older facilities scattered around and underneath the town going back as much as a hundred and fifty or two hundred years, some still operational, some cleared and abandoned. Some abandoned without being cleared? Miles’s ears strained, trying to detect a reassuring hum of refrigeration machinery beyond the blood-surf and the angels’ cries. Now, there was a nightmare for him -- all those banks of drawers bumping under his fingertips concealing not frozen hope, but warm rotting death.

It would be stupid to run.

The angels kept sleeting. Miles refused to let what was left of his mind be diverted in an attempt to count them, even by a statistically valid sampling-and-multiplication method. Miles had done such a back-of-the-napkin rough calculation when he’d first arrived here on Kibou-daini, what, just five days ago? Seems longer. If the cryo-corpses were stacked up along the corridors at a density, on average, of a hundred per ten meters, that made for ten thousand along each kilometer of corridor. One hundred kilometers of corridors for every million frozen dead. Therefore, something between a hundred and fifty and two hundred kilometers of cryo-corridors tucked around this town somewhere.

I am so lost.

His hands were scraped and throbbing, his trouser knees torn and damp. With blood? There had been crawlspaces and ducts, hadn’t there? Yes, what had seemed like kilometers of them, too. And more ordinary utility tunnels, lit by ceiling tubes and not lined with centuries of mortality. His weary legs stumbled, and he froze -- um, stopped -- once more, to be sure of his balance. He wished fiercely for his cane, gone astray in the scuffle earlier -- how many hours ago, now? -- he could be using it like a blind man on Old Earth or Barrayar’s own Time of Isolation, tapping in front of his feet for those so-vividly-imagined gaps in the floor.

His would-be kidnappers hadn’t roughed him up too badly in the botched snatch, relying instead on a hypospray of sedative to keep their captive under control. Too bad it had been in the same class of sedatives to which Miles was violently allergic -- or even, judging by his present symptoms, the identical drug. Expecting a drowsy deadweight, they’d instead found themselves struggling with a maniacal little screaming man. This suggested his snatchers hadn’t known everything about him, a somewhat reassuring thought.

Or even anything about him. You bastards are on the top of Imperial Lord Auditor Miles Vorkosigan’s very own shit list now, you bet. But under what name? Only five days on this benighted world, and already total strangers are trying to kill me. Sadly, it wasn’t even a record. He wished he knew who they’d been. He wished he were back home in the Barrayaran Empire, where the dread title of Imperial Auditor actually meant something to people. I wish those wretched angels would stop shrieking at me.

“Flights of angels,” he muttered in experimental incantation, “sing me to my rest.”

The angels declined to form up into a ball like a will-o’-the-wisp and lead him onward out of this place. So much for his dim hope that his subconscious had been keeping track of his direction while the rest of his mind was out, and would now produce some neat inspiration in dramatic form. Onward. One foot in front of the other, wasn’t that the grownup way of solving problems? Surely he ought to be a grownup at his age.

He wondered if he was going in circles.

His trailing hand wavered through black air across a narrow cross-corridor, made for access to the banks’ supporting machinery, which he ignored. Later, another. He’d been suckered into exploring down too many of those already, which was part of how he’d got so hideously turned around. Go straight or, if his corridor dead-ended, right, as much as possible, that was his new rule.

But then his bumping fingers crossed something that was not a bank of cryo-drawers, and he stopped abruptly. He felt around without turning, because turning, he’d discovered, destroyed what little orientation he still possessed. Yes, a door! If only it wasn’t another utility closet. If only it was unlocked, for a change.

Unlocked, yes! Miles hissed through his teeth and pulled. Hinges creaked with corrosion. It seemed to weigh a ton, but the bloody thing moved! He stuck an experimental foot through the gap and felt around. A floor, not a drop -- if his senses weren’t lying, again. He had nothing with which to prop open the door; he hoped he might find it again if this proved another dead end. Carefully, he knelt on all fours and eased through, feeling in front of him.

Not another closet. Stairs, emergency stairs! He seemed to be on a landing in front of the door. To his right, steps went up, cool and gritty under his sore hand. To his left, down. Which way? He had to run out of up sooner, surely. It was probably a delusion, if a powerful one, that he might go down forever. This maze could not descend to the planet’s magma, after all. The heat would thaw the dead.

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Barbara Barnett - Talking about TV—on TV! - HOUSE, M.D.

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Talking about TV—on TV!


Okay. You’ve written a wonderful new book and you’re waiting for the buzz to start. Your publicity folks (or you, yourself) have laid the groundwork and sent dozens of press releases from coast to coast trumpeting the greatness of your book. So now it’s a couple weeks later, say a Friday afternoon. You get a call from the publicist. “Fox Chicago had a cancellation for Monday morning’s news show. Can you be there by 7 a.m.? I already told them you’d do it,” intones the mildly enthusiastic voice on the other end of the phone. Why, I wondered, isn’t her heart beating as fast as mine? I can barely catch my breath. Television? Me? I stammer my acceptance. Great. Now what do I do?

I’d never been on television before making an appearance on Fox Chicago’s Morning News. As the author of Chasing Zebras: The Unofficial Guide to House, M.D., I was being asked to discuss the state of the seventh season and the budding relationship between central character Dr. Gregory House (Hugh Laurie) and his boss, Dean of Medicine Lisa Cuddy (Lisa Edelstein). Did I mention that it was live TV?

Connecting with the news producer, I was told what sorts of questions to expect and that the segment would be about three or four minutes. “Oh, and don’t wear black,” was the final bit of advice from the producer.

I scrambled to find something to wear that would magically shave 60 pounds from my frame (at least), which considering that “they” say TV adds 10 pounds is a pretty tall order. I suppose the good news was that I had a great excuse to go clothes shopping, makeup shopping and have my hair done. (By the way, did you know that there exists makeup made just for photo shoots and TV? Cool!)

I spent much of the weekend re-reading my book, and getting out the word to my readers and fans of my Blogcritics House column. My publicist gave me all sorts of advice (none of which I could remember by Monday) and said we’d do a post-mortem of my appearance to see where I might improve. I also spent most of the weekend suffering anxiety over whether my readers would now all take note of my middle agedness, bad teeth and double chin.

The Morning News anchors could not have been nicer, both being fans of the show. We gossiped about the show and that I’d had a chance to photograph Hugh Laurie and Jesse Spencer (who plays Chase on the show) over the summer when their band was in town for a benefit. I barely registered that the cameras were rolling and I did my best to ignore the microphone pack stabbing me in the hip and not look directly at the camera (but at the people talking to me).

We spoke on-air for about four minutes, and I was sure I’d flopped. But a reassuring email from my publicists told me that I “was a natural” and seemed like I’d been doing live TV for years. Post-mortem was completely unnecessary. Phew! Over the next few months, I made the rounds to Fox affiliates in Milwaukee, Detroit and Madison, Wisconsin. My wonderful readers recorded that first (and every other) interview, posting everything on YouTube. Each YouTube video has received a couple thousand views total, and I’m sure accounts for at least a couple of blips in books sales, especially here in the Midwest. So, if can get booked as an expert (rather than just to promote your book), I can’t guarantee you’ll get a huge bump in sales, but, as they say, “it can’t hurt!”

Barbara Barnett is Co-Executive Editor of Blogcritics, an Internet magazine of pop culture, politics and more owned by Technorati Media. Always a pop-culture geek, Barbara was raised on a steady diet of TV (and TV dinners), but she always found her way to TV’s antiheroes and misunderstood champions, whether on TV, in the movies or in literature.

Barbara Barnett
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Barnett’s regular column, “Welcome to the End of the Thought Process: An Introspective Look at House, M.D.” features insightful episode commentaries and interviews with the House cast and creative team. It is the place for intelligent discussion of the hit television series starring Hugh Laurie.

Barbara has had an eclectic career. With an undergraduate degree in biology and minors in chemistry and English, she pursued a PhD in Public Policy Analysis after spending a few years working in the chemical and pharmaceutical industries. Her first professional writing gig was with a food industry trade magazine, and although it wasn’t exactly like writing for The New Yorker, it completely hooked her on the profession of writing.

She also writes lots of other things, including technology (from a non-geek perspective), the movies, politics and all things Jewish. Based in the north shore suburbs of Chicago, Barnett is married with two brilliant children and a dog. Chasing Zebras: The Unofficial Guide to House, M.D. is her first (commercial) book. She hopes it’s not her last.

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Excerpt From: War With Pigeons

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War With Pigeons by Tae Kim

Chapter 14

The Café Third Avenue

Helen looked over to Peter. He was almost as handsome as she recalled her father being. There were many things about him that reminded her of her father. He was gentle and kind. Perhaps he would be her angel now.
“You’re nursing that beer,” Helen remarked.

“Oh, sorry about that,” Peter replied, as he hastened to chug the beer remaining in his can.

“Have you selected a song yet?”

“No, not yet,” he replied. “I haven’t even had a chance to look at the song book.”

“Do you mind if I put in a song first,” Helen asked.
Peter was more than happy to have Helen begin. She began with a ballad, in a voice as powerful as that of the song’s artist Lee Sora. As with most ballads from the homeland, the song was about love, loss and mi-ryun, a stubborn reluctance to let go of the past.

Helen was accustomed to singing in front of others, as she sang virtually every night at the room salon. But as with most things she had to do at the shop, the songs she sang at work, typically fast-paced dance songs, were not the ones she truly wished to perform. Her voice and her mood were more partial to the love ballads, and she was happy with the opportunity to sing that which her heart yearned to sing.

♪ Please forgive me, for the time during which I could not see you ♪ she began in a deep, sultry voice.
Her singing voice was much deeper than the voice with which she spoke. It had a transcendent soulfulness to it much like the voices of Sade, Annie Lenox and Alison Moyet. Peter was quite mesmerized with the first note she uttered, as she stood in front of the small screen displaying the lyrics, the outline of her profile gently swaying in front of Peter to the melody.

♪ The way in which you laughed, enough to thin the sun, your image is what I remember ♪ she continued.

Peter’s command of his native language permitted him to make out most, but not all of the lyrics. Those portions he was able to understand, though, touched his heart.

♪ Next time, take care not to meet a woman like me, you need to find your happiness ♪
He thought he could listen to her forever.

♪ I’m happy that I was able to see you along the way, I can never forget you, till the day I am no more – I love you ♪

By the end of the song, Peter recognized he was in trouble. Never had a song had such an effect on him before. The sadness, the melancholy, the pain of both the lyrics and the beautiful woman who had sung them, wrenched his heart. He felt quite vulnerable, like a swimmer in the middle of the ocean who had just discovered a cramping in his leg. He kept trying to clear his heart, in the way the swimmer would try to massage out the cramp. For now, he was a sitting target – he would have done anything that Helen might have asked. Luckily, Helen asked for nothing from him.

“Why don’t you put in a song Peter?” Helen suggested in a voice that seemed more mortal.

“I’m going to have a hard time following that act,” Peter replied honestly.
“Still, I’d like to hear you sing.”

Peter selected one of the few songs he knew how to sing in their native language. It too was a love ballad and in some ways he was relieved to be singing if, for nothing else, so that he wouldn’t have to think about Helen’s song. His singing, in all fairness, was not unpleasant to hear. His deep, soothing voice translated faithfully from speaking to singing. Singing also allowed Peter to release some of the tension that had built up in his heart.

In this manner the two spent the night singing together and drinking. By the end, they had finished off nearly seven six-packs. They left the waiter a large tip for having to run back and forth from the karaoke to the grocery store, picking up the beer.

Peter hailed a cab for Helen, hugged her good-night and grabbed a cab for his apartment. He was quite exhausted by the time he had finished climbing the six flights of stairs to his front door – a climb made more difficult by the weight of the backpack he was carrying. He opened the backpack to see what had been so heavy. He saw the Asian pear Simon’s mother had given him, the one he had been reluctant to share. He placed the pear on his coffee table, still not willing to eat it just yet, and collapsed upon his bed.

It was undoubtedly the alcohol that caused him to awaken in the middle of the night. His throat felt drier than it would have if he had swallowed cotton balls. He searched his refrigerator, which to his dismay, was depleted of any non-alcoholic beverages. He had no alternative but to eat the Asian pear.

Peter grabbed it from the coffee table and brought it over to the sink. He did not bother to peel the pear but sank his teeth into its firm skin. He tore away a healthy chunk like a shark ripping into the old man’s catch. He feasted on the juices as the broken skin and flesh crunched between his teeth. The ruffage slid down his throat and the feeling of it gently scraping against his dry esophagus was strangely pleasing. He bit into the pear again and again, slowly rotating it between his fingers until the teeth marks came full circle and completed what appeared as railroad tracks of carnage. And like a famished vampire he sat upon his kitchen floor, devouring what remained of the Asian pear as if it were a bird he had captured in his claws, and he were sucking on its sweet rejuvenating blood. The Asian pear was so perfectly fulfilling – at least with respect to one of his hungers.


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Inside the Mind of Danny Ryan

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Inside the Mind of Danny Ryan


Adventures in Nowhere is a coming-of-age novel, a style in which the main character gains a greater understanding of the world, but if readers are not interested in that character, then they will likely throw down the book and growl, “The kid is a jerk! Who cares if his understanding improves?” In order to avoid this outcome, writers must draw the reader into a close relationship with the protagonist.

In Adventures in Nowhere, I attempt this in several ways. One of the most basic is to use centered consciousness, which means that all of the book’s action involves my protagonist, Danny Ryan, and that the narrator enters Danny’s mind only. Other characters express their thoughts, of course, but only through dialog. By using centered consciousness, I make Danny the key to everything in the story without having to make him the novel’s first-person narrator, which would have limited my story-telling options.

In the following passage from Adventures in Nowhere, Danny has been sent to a neighbor’s house to clear up a misimpression he has caused. In order to get out of a scrape, Danny has implied that the Ryan house is infested with fleas. His mother finds out about this when Mr. Arnold drops off some banana stalks, which are reputed to draw the fleas. Once a stalk is covered, the sufferer can then throw it out and along with it the fleas.

He knocked and was surprised when Mr. Arnold answered the door in a white shirt and a tie. Danny was not sure exactly what Mr. Arnold did for a living, but he was unusual in Nowhere because he dressed up to go to work.

“You’re Danny, aren’t you?” he said pleasantly.

“Yes, sir.”

“Come on in. I’ll get Abigail.”

“Oh, no sir!” Danny said. “I want to talk to you.”

“Is that so? Well, let’s sit on the porch here. Would you like a soft drink?”

“No, thanks.”

“Okay, shoot. What’s on your mind?”

“My mom sent me down. Uh . . . she says thanks for the banana stalks.”

“Oh, she’s very welcome. We have a lot of them. I really don’t know if they’ll work with fleas, but I’ve heard so much about it, I was glad to have a chance to see if they’d have an effect. We never had fleas ourselves.”

“Yeah, well, that’s the thing. We don’t either.”

“No?”

“It’s a misunderstanding.”

Mr. Arnold stared at Danny for a moment and then a look of realization flooded over his face.

“Oh, I see. Of course not. Tell your mother it’s forgotten.”

There was something in Mr. Arnold’s manner that was a little unnerving, but Danny couldn’t put his finger on exactly what. He was not threatening or mean. Quite the contrary. Danny carried on.

“I made a stupid joke about fleas and everybody took it the wrong way.”

“That’s so common,” Mr. Arnold said. “I can’t count the times I’ve had the same thing happen to me.”

Danny shifted in his seat. Things seemed to be going well. Why did he feel so uneasy?

“Are you sure I can’t get you that soda?” Mr. Arnold asked.

“No, sir. Just to be clear. We don’t have fleas and we never did, okay?”

“Absolutely!”

“I’m not just saying that we don’t have fleas. I’m telling you we actually don’t have fleas.”

“And I’m saying that I understand and am happy for you.”

“I’ll be going then.”

“Danny, you are welcome here anytime. I’ve enjoyed talking to you. Give my best to your mother.”

Mr. Arnold opened the door, and Danny walked out, pausing a few steps down the path to turn around. Mr. Arnold was still standing in the doorway. He gave Danny a hearty wave. Danny waggled his fingers back and headed home, thinking the Arnolds were the most exasperating family on earth.

In this scene, the narrator makes it clear what Danny is feeling. There is something about Mr. Arnold’s ready acceptance of his story that is “unnerving,” and he finds the Arnolds “exasperating,” both good descriptive words, but not what Danny would have chosen if he had been the narrator. They are too sophisticated for Danny, but they are allowable because the third-person narrator is not bound by Danny’s vocabulary.

Also, because the consciousness is centered on Danny, readers have to guess at why Mr. Arnold is acting as he does. They know a “look of realization flooded his face,” but what does he realize? I hope they conclude that Mr. Arnold thinks the Ryans actually do have fleas but are embarrassed that Danny has let it slip, so they have sent him to take it back. Being the good chap that he is, Mr. Arnold tries to set Danny at ease and does the opposite. That’s what I intended, anyway, and I think readers who come to that conclusion get a sense of participation in the story and feel Danny’s discomfort more acutely because they realize something that he hasn’t quite worked out.

The centered consciousness technique invites readers inside the mind of Danny Ryan and allows them to experience both his insights and his limitations. I hope this intimate knowledge of his inner life helps readers care about Danny and consequently be uplifted by his new vision of the world.


John Ames

About the Author:

John Ames has a master’s degree in English from the University of Florida, where he was a Ford Fellow. After graduation, he built a rustic house and lived for several years on the edge of a spiritual community located near Gainesville, Florida. John’s search for enlightenment ended when he decided that he was too far from a movie theater. He moved inside the Gainesville city limits and taught English and film for thirty years at Santa Fe College.

He has produced and acted in numerous short films and videos, including the cable TV series the “Tub Interviews,” wherein all the interviewees were required to be in a bathtub. For ten years he reviewed movies for PBS radio station WUFT. He has appeared as a standup comedian and has designed and marketed Florida-themed lamps. He coauthored Second Serve: The Renée Richards Story (Stein and Day, 1983) and its sequel No Way Renée: The Second Half of My Notorious Life (Simon & Schuster, 2007), and Speaking of Florida (University Presses of Florida, 1993).

His recent book is a coming-of-age novel titled Adventures in Nowhere.

You can visit his website at www.johnamesauthor.com.